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I'm pretty happy about this: http://alphacentauri2.info/index.php?topic=17686.0-Go have a look. There's some seriously sophomoric humor, 'cause this was a roundtable story done by a bunch of forum boyz, and of course there was some no-class humor - but we got serious about it, and I think it wound up making for a neat little pulpy space/time adventure with a little romance. (I mostly wrote the romance.) Good dumb fun - and we really fell for the love interest...Posting chapter 1 has gotten me off my dead butt and finally doing something I've put off for nearly seven years - finishing editing the thing into credible English. The primary author was a 19 year-old German who had immaculate grammar, sober, but not so much for a lot of the story.I'm doing my second editing pass on chapter two right now. It's gonna be a relief to get this off my chest.
Chapter Two finished - that was the point I stopped editing as we went, 'cause big creative disagreement, and by the time it was resolved satisfactorily, too much work had piled up.Chapter Three begins slightly over halfway through, and I recall resuming editing towards the end; I'm probably about half done, now, which is real progress. Thinking I'll pace out posting new installments one a day...
[I hate to ruin the surprize, A lot of the charm of this collabaration is that you guys surprize me. I don't know what's going on, and as long as it's fun and makes sense in the end, I don't always need to. This will ruin a lot if you guys like it, but here goes. What I had in mind is that, get this, the Etherials of the of the Outer Deeps of Space (an elder race; sort of Guardians of the Universe figures- or Ariasians, if you're up on your E.E. Smith, but more mysterious and morally unfathomable) know there's something cosmically important going on, of which the predicted solar ****-up is only a symptom, but maybe a central piece of the cosmic thingy, as are the Martians and their powers. There are many pieces on the board, and most of them and the bigger game never come onstage in this story, I think. The Etherials don't like to take overt action; they seem to tend to prefer teaching a man to fish over giving him a fish. They saw that there was a earth man who could fix the local element of the problem should all the pieces needed be in place. The human in question was not available at the space-time coordinates needed, being dead, and for some reason, probably the mini-nuke tht killed him, cannot be retrived at any point in the timeline when he has the needed skills, so- Here comes the part really, really I don't want to give in about. They made a clone of his beloved wife- with improvements designed to enable her to protect him, and some fuzzy memories derived from the original, which cause her to tend to forget that she's an enhanced clone made for a mission. Her situation is further complicated by enhancements made to her natural affection for a young punk version of her "husband". In short, to ensure her devotion to kid David and his protection, they gave her a bad case of the screamin' drawers for his pimply frame. But the original Melinda had had some issues with with her sexuality- and Agent-Melinda remembers that it hurt when the original lost her virginity. She's expriencing lot of ambivilence about having her way with the kid. Whatever is going on with the unplanned time-shift to the moon and the Vergs and Jack and everything, it was really partly set up by the Etherials to put David through experiences that would prepare him for whatever he's supposed to do. The situation is complicated by the fact that the Etherials' antimatter universe interdimensional counterparts, the Overlords of the Outer Dark of Space, -somewhat sinster sorts, naturally- did the same thing with an android that was given a nearly identical power-set. This Earth-Two Melinda, Specimen-M, swaps places with Agent+M at times. She's not out to kill David, but -Melinda's goals are different than +Melinda's, and killing him may be necessary. Sweetening the plot twist/complcations, she has the same insanely intense warmth for David's pathetic form as Melinda+. And she's a really well-made fembot, if you follow me; nudge-nudge, wink-wink. Very little of this should come out any time soon, and a lot about the Etherials may not ever become known to the protagonists (the Melindas probably don't know much about who made them or even the why of their missions) at all but I think it should provide a canvas upon which we can paint in/fit our vague intentions for the story. For myself, I want Melinda to be real, and the robot **** made me very, very unhappy as a reader, and indeed, probably gave me editor's block. This gives us back a biological Mel without contradicting anything, and the swapping situation is open-ended. All I know is that it was M+ for sure on the vacation/butt-rubbing night. It could maybe have been M- who kissed him, and she may or may not have been totally honest with him then; I dunno. M+ is in love with the little punk, though, and M- fighting it, maybe. David has a child's obsession with his first love, whoever she is at any given moment. At some point, I see M+ getting a bloody nose and confuusing the heck outta the boys. A few sober pargraphs about the Etherials' place in the universe could be inserted at the beginning/serve as a prologue that seems to have nothing to do with David's story at first...]
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